Friday 26 August 2016

Olympic Moment in time


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WALT: Describe a moment in time in detail.
I line up bang as the race started.

stomp as I run across the track.

I’m so excited.

I hear runners sprinting across the track.

I hear my heart beating in the middle of the race.

I wonder If I could get a quick picture.

I get to the finish.

I'm so so happy.

I grab the gold and cheer.

The end.
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  1. Jemma29 August 2016 at 11:21

    Hi Liam
    Nice work I really like they way that you used capital letters and how you felt
    Maybe next time you shouldn't put a full stops at the end of every line.

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